It's a beautiful peace of work with an honest and proud message. one willing to do anything to help the needy at any cost, including drowning the not-so-needy with their own expense and make the feel how it is to be weak, starved, and voiceless; virtually invisible to the public. This is a problem that we have in our world today, no doubt. We care too much of helping our own selfish hides instead of tending to the ones who need it most. Bringing attention to this subject will hopefully educate more of our public and make them see that just because we don't have a five star meal on our tables doesn't mean we're going to starve.

A way to increase the feel, tone, and above all the message of this poem is to use stronger words without loosing its conversational tone. The rhythm is nearly constant, but it feels to me that it skipped or over-ran the syllable count a few times. I'm not sure if this was intended for this poem, but I feel that the rhythm can be straightened out a little to keep the reader locked into the work.

That's just what I feel about it. fair?